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[Lin M Smith]

Name: Lin M Smith


Race: Human


Age: 25


Gender: Male


Height: 6'


Build: Tall but skinny. Also a bit ripped in the arms and legs. Belly is flat and back is wide and has some carves.

Hair: Black


Eye Color: Blue


Sexual Orientation: Females only


Clothing: Black Tank top, Black Pants, Black over coat, Black army boatsBack Hat some times if it's only raining, also it has some gold on it but it's not gold.


Distinguishing Marks: A tattoo on Lin's back in the shape of a lone wolf and one on His arm with his 1st lovers name

Appearance: Lin looks like he's a cold man but does not feel like it when he helps others his eyes are cold and lifeless after feeling so much pain and other things after his life was over at the age of 20. now at the age of 25 he feels like love and other things are out of reach.
As time goes by lin does not look like any one from the Realm of domhan. without a home to call his own he wanders the world in search of one and love.

Versatility - N/a

Intelligence -Smart and kind


Limits - none when it comes to puzzles. When it come to love he dont know what to do.


Birth City: N/A

City: N/A[

b]Occupation: Wanderer/hired Hand for farm
work.

Pet(s):
 A Wolf

Suggested Beast: Wolf

Desired Beast: Wolf

Beast: None YetRank/Secondary Occupation: N/A

Weapons:Twin blades
The first oneThis one twin blade is made with some red ropes at it's handle and it's blade is about 4' long

The 2nd oneThis one twin Blade is made some blue rope on it's handle and it's blade is also 4'
both made by the same black smith,At the old time shop at the same time. But did not have any power of that kind. They have no powers that Lin knows of yet but in time they will come to have some.

Magic: Dark spells wind and water . Lin Only knows a few but somewhat master water for healing. Lin has a few dark spells,and are only one's thats for pick pocketing.

Abilities: Running swiming and reading at high speeds.

Strengths: To help someone in need.

Weaknesses: Not able to open up to someone my heart is locked up.

Personality: Lin is a Nice guy but is hard to get to. His heart is lock away from being heart to much. after the death of his mother and then years latter his true love cheating on him he no longer feels love, but he wants to but can't


Biography This story is about a young man's past. It all stated in the days of darkness know as the bloody air. everyone in town was getting sick and didn't know why it seem like some kind of bug but know one knew. So It seem like it was only in town that was going on. As time went on the town came under fire from the king, From the eyes of the people he did not care about them. We knew this for we saw the royal seal on the shilled of the knights. At the time Lin was two And was going to try and walk to his mother for the first time,The night sky was lighted up by the fire. the hyrulen knights set a fire to lin's home town and So lin's mother took Him away as he saw his father cut down. as Lin's mother started to run she came to a river there was a boat and so she got on with Lin and they went down rive to only see that they home was in flames. now at the age of 6 Lin was coming back from a place in the woods where an old man was teaching me to read and Fight with a sword style that needs two blades and some spell work. Lin knew healing but did not master all of it. only the heal for small wounds but when He came home he saw the same knights from four years ago his mother was cut down and he ran. As He saw her face. unable to do anything his crys were the only thing that did out come not but pure hated. He sown that he will kill them. many years has past and now He walks the roads in hopes that he can kill them with his heart locked away it was just something he wanted to find what was missing.




Strengths: -Social: Good humored and witty Lin does get along with most people He meets and fits in any environment.-Career: N/a

-Racial: Lin Does not know many things About himself all he knows is that he is human.

-Combat: As stated above,

-Intelligence:  Lin can read many things at high speed and get work done fast when alone

WeaknessesSocial:-  Lin cant open his heart to anyone.

Career.:  Works alone -Racial:

-Combat:

-Intelligence: cant read the air between others,








Family:Mother: DeadFather: DeadSister: MissingBother: Dead

[Harken]

Hello. As of right now, all I have to say is just elaborate on everything.  Look at some of the approved applications for an idea of what we expect here at GoA.  You're off to a good start, but I want your character to have a firm footing before jumping into Aedolyn.

[Lin M Smith]

crys.* it's so nice to meat you and thank you for giving me the time and day. on like other sites. I'm a bit slow making  bio's but i did have help also this is a new bio i had to let go of my other one for it may have been to powerful to if you can tell me what i need to do thanks

[Lin M Smith]

Okay the new one down

[Verisiel]

Hi Lin,

Thank you for being patient and sorry for the wait. As you may recall, I sent you a PM a while ago, giving you an exact code and tips on how to possibly improve your application. That will be very helpful as the staff now try to work with you on getting Lin M Smith approved.

In our Library, we have a Character Creation Page, made specifically to help in situations like these. For your convenience, here is the most important segment to examine:

Name: Character names should be original and reflect the fantasy genre of GoA. Characters need not have a surname, and first name-only characters are perfectly acceptable.

Age: How old your character is. Keep in mind races age differently.

Sex: Male or female?

Race: Players have a choice of the races found in the people doc.

Occupation: What your character does to survive, such as living off the land or a job to make money.

Appearance: How your character looks. Paint a detailed picture with your words, and include such things as height, weight, hair, eyes, and build.

Personality: This seemingly benign piece of information will largely impact in what way you roleplay your character. What makes your character tick? What drives him or her? Why does he or she do the things they do?

Alignment: Which of these alignments is your character?
   
Skills and Abilities: What your character’s proficiencies are; weaponry, survival skills, knowledge, magic, etc. Skills are generally things your character has learned, and abilities are things your character has an innate talent for. Explain how they learned their skills or acquired their abilities.

Possessions: Any unique items of note that you feel are important to your character.

Strengths and Weaknesses: The amount of a character's weakness must be equal to or greater than the amount of strength. While your character's combat abilities are important, we actually want you to think of other aspects of your character's personality and characteristics as a whole than just where they excel in a fight, and where they are vulnerable, when deciding your character's advantages and disadvantages. These things may encompass, but certainly are not limited to: social, career, racial, intelligence, etc.

History: Your character’s history shows us what helped shape their personality, what experiences in their past have made them what they are today. What is most important here is a great deal of detail. We recommend writing at least 4 to 5 paragraphs. Be mindful of your spelling and grammar. Your character's history must take place in Aedolyn; we won't accept characters from different settings.

When look over your character application right now, it seems that you followed a different format. Using the above template, can you please revise the application so that it is in the right form with all the required information? (Once again, that PM I sent earlier will be a huge help in this)

[Sorcha]

Your current app is so disorganized its hard to make sense of! But like said above, use that template! It's what it's there for.

[Lin M Smith]

hi. umm sorry it had been a long time since i been here can someone help me get things fiixed.

[Verisiel]

Hi Lin. 

Do you still have that PM I sent you, because that basically has all of the corrections that you need.

[Lin M Smith]

umm i dont think so sorry it has been sometime since i have been here.

[Varius]

Hey Lin,

I think I have a few pointers to help you shape your character into a more defined product.

1) Build, hair color, eye color, height, appearance, clothing, and distinguishing marks could be put together to form one section for your character's overall appearance. Try to write it in a flowing sense; let each feature you describe lead to the next until you've covered everything.

2) Clearly define all your strengths and weaknesses; Social, Career, Racial, Combat, and intelligence. Try to be specific as possible, and give an example of how it could be a strength or weakness. Remember that you must have Weaknesses greater than or equal to your strength. Not only does this lead to a deeper character, it also gives you constant obstacles to overcome as you roleplay, and makes your character more believable and realistic, which in turn is easier to identify with.

3) Elaborate on your equipment. You have two 4' twin blades, made by the same blacksmith, but is that all? You could also go into a little more descriptive detail on the blades -- are they curved? Straight? Single-edged or double-edged blade? Are they weighted to give a stronger cleave, or are they balanced to be easy to handle with finesse?

4) Abilities should be special capabilities of your character, not just impressive physical attributes. While high-speed running, swimming and reading are indeed good abilities to have, what else is your character capable of? Can he pick locks, or juggle swords? Maybe he is good at compensating for the weight of different weapons and can throw them accurately despite them not being balanced. Maybe he is a capable forager, and can survive where others would think it to be too hostile of an environment. It should also make sense for your character to have the abilities he does have -- for example, Maybe the character was part of a circus troupe, and that's where they learned to juggle and throw things. Think about how you can integrate your character's history and abilities.

5) Magic has been divided up, and should be written in a fashion that fits the standard in the library. Though it would probably be perfectly acceptable to have your character refer to his magic as "dark" (perhaps he uses it, but doesn't like it because it can really hurt people?), it doesn't really fit with the current magic system. I'd suggest you go over the post on magic in the library again: http://library.aedolyn.net/Magic_System

To me it sounds like you have split time studying Spiritual magic for healing, and illusion magic for pick-pocketing.

6) Please expand on the pet! Not many characters take to having a pet, and it can be a very good place to add depth to a character. What is the relationship between the pet and the master? Are they reliable companions, helping save each other in even the toughest situations? Has the wolf had a hard time accepting its dependency of you as his master, and doesn't like to listen to commands? These are all things that can help build a more satisfying role-playing experience, and further character building.

7) Your Biography could use a little bit of formatting to make it a bit easier to read, and quite a bit of elaboration. For example, I'd love to know more about this old man that was training you. Was he an old mentor, a friend of your character's parents perhaps? Did he maybe live in the forest to hide from the knights because of his history, and the king had the village burned down because of him? Perhaps your father could have died protecting the knowledge of his whereabouts. Perhaps the man training you knew things he shouldn't, and was powerful enough to be considered a threat to the king, and he passed it all to your character so it wouldn't all be lost?

The mentor/apprentice relationship can be even more significant than the relationship between a pet and its master, and as such there is a LOT of potential there.

I think that's all I have to suggest. I hope I wasn't too hard on you, because you do have the workings of a pretty neat character... it just needs expanding! I look forward to seeing how you expand the character with added details.

[Lin M Smith]

okay thanks for the help.